请大家帮我看看，我自以为还是比较合适的:
Dear Sir/Madam,
Name: WXXXX XXX
D.O.B: May XX, 19XX
Telphone: 13XXXXXXX1
I submitted my application to CIO （Centralized-Intake-Office）on March 18, 2009 for initial assessment for skilled worker (category 1) with courier number CTXXXX88CN and the payment of remittance took on April 8, 2009. Till present, I haven’t received any acknowledgement from the CIO. Though I sent enquiry letter either by email or courier, there’s no response at all.
I wonder whether your office received any acknowledgement from CIO upon my application. My current occupation is Software Development Manager.
My mailing address is
Wxxxx xxx c/o Rm. xxxx,No.x xxx, xxxxxxx Estate, XXXX XXX, XXXX Rd., Haidian District, Beijing, PC:1000XX, P.R. China
北京市海淀区xxxxx小区x号楼xxx 室 xx（收）邮编：1000xx
Would you please notify me the result by either email
xxxx@gmail.com or fax 0086-10-xxxxxx?
Besides, you also can contact me via cell phone 0086-139xxxxxx for your convenience.
I am looking forward to your kind consideration and prompt reply.
Sincerely Yours
xxxx
其中的xxxx是为隐藏个人信息做的修改,实际的信中我肯定没有写错.
