看看我的职业职责描述与翻译是否准确？请高手提意见。

[cnyycl]

我申请的是 2143 Mining Engineers

我填schedule3表是这样填的：

From​

To​

Occupation​

NOC​

Years of experience​

Main duties​

M Y​

M Y​

​

06 2007​

11 2009​

Mine Ventilation Senior Engineer​

2143​

​

[ ] Less than 1 year​

Development of Mine Safety Training Program​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

[ ] 1 year but less than 2​

Supervision of Security Qualification of Mine Workers​

​

[a] 2 years but less than 3​

Mine Safety Training Organization and Iimplementation of Training Programs​

​

[ ] 3 years but less than 4​

Mine Safety Training and Training Classes​

​

[ ] 4 years or more​

​

​

04 2005​

06 2007​

Mine Ventilation Engineer​

2143​

​

[ ] Less than 1 year​

Mine Rescue Facilities, Setting and Monitoring​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

[ ] 1 year but less than 2​

Professional Training for Mine Rescue Team​

​

[a] 2 years but less than 3​

Mine Disaster Relief and Rescue​

​

[ ] 3 years but less than 4​

Mine Disaster Prevention and Treatment Planning​

​

[ ] 4 years or more​

Implementation and Coordination of the Mine Disaster Prevention Plan​

​

10 1998​

04 2005​

Mine Ventilation Engineer​

2143​

​

[ ] Less than 1 year​

The Planning and Adjustment of Ventilation Systems​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

​

[ ] 1 year but less than 2​

Mine Ventilation Design and Setting Standards​

​

[ ] 2 years but less than 3​

Mine Design and Distribution of Air Flow​

​

[ ] 3 years but less than 4​

Mine Ventilation and Mechanical Regulation​

​

[a] 4 years or more​

Mine Ventilation and Safety Checks​

各位移友高手给我看看以上的表职业职责描述有问题吗？
请参考：

[FONT=宋体]2143 [/FONT][FONT=宋体]加拿大采矿工程师 Mining Engineers[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]加拿大采矿工程师职责概述[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]采矿工程师规划，设计，组织和监管矿山，矿山设施，系统和设备的发展计划；金属或非金属矿物提炼和地下或矿山表层采矿工作的准备和监管。[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Mining engineers plan[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，design，organize and supervise the development of mines，mine facilities，systems and equipment; and prepare and supervise the extraction of metallic or non-metallic minerals and ores from underground or surface mines[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]采矿工程师们受雇于矿业公司，工程咨询公司，制造商，政府，教育和研究机构。[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Mining engineers are employed by mining companies[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，consulting engineering companies，manufacturers，government and in educational and research institutions[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]加拿大采矿工程师头衔范例 Example Titles[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]采矿设计工程师 mine design engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿物工程师 engineer，mineral[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]采矿工程师 engineer，mining[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿物勘探工程师 exploration engineer，mines[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿山设计工程师 mine design engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿山开发工程师 mine development engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿山布局工程师 mine layout engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]开采规划工程师 mine planning engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿产生产工程师 mine production engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]采矿安全工程师 mine safety engineer[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿井通风工程师 mine ventilation engineer[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿产敷料工程师 mineral dressing engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿物工程师 mineral engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]矿山勘探工程师 mines exploration engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]采矿工程师 mining engineer[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]加拿大采矿工程师主要职责 Main duties[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]采矿工程师履行下列部分或全部职责[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Mining engineers perform some or all of the following duties[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]进行矿石，煤炭矿产或储藏的初步调查和研究，以评估潜在采矿业务的经济和环境可行性[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Conduct preliminary surveys and studies of ore[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，mineral or coal deposits to assess the economic and environmental feasibility of potential mining operations[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]确定适当的手段安全有效地挖掘矿藏[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Determine the appropriate means of safely and efficiently mining deposits[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]为采矿，建筑或拆毁工作确定并建议适当的爆破方法[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Determine and advise on appropriate drilling and blasting methods for mining[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，construction or demolition[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]竖井，通风系统，矿井服务，运输系统和支撑结构[/FONT][FONT=宋体]的设计[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Design[/FONT][FONT=宋体] shafts[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，ventilation systems，mine services，haulage systems and supporting structures[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]设计，制定和实施计算机应用程序，用于矿井设计，矿山模型，绘图或监测矿井条件等方面[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Design[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，develop and implement computer applications such as for mine design，mine modelling，mapping or for monitoring mine conditions[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]与其他工程专家一起规划，设计或选择采矿设备及机械，矿石标准及设备[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Plan and design or select mining equipment and machinery and mineral treatment machinery and equipment in collaboration with other engineering specialists[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]计划，组织和监管[/FONT][FONT=宋体]矿山和矿山结构的开拓以及矿山的经营和维护[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Plan[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，organize and supervise the development of mines and mine structures and the operation and maintenance of mines[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]编写业务和项目概算，时间安排和报告[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Prepare operations and project estimates[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，schedules and reports[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]实施和协调矿山安全计划[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Implement and co-ordinate mine safety programs[/FONT][FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]监管和统筹技术人员，技术专家，调查人员及其他工程师和科学家的工作[/FONT]​

[FONT=宋体]Supervise and co-ordinate the work of technicians[/FONT][FONT=宋体]，technologists，survey personnel，and other engineers and scientists.[/FONT]​

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请各位加移们提点意见，特别是职责描述和英文翻译是否准确，本人将参考您的意见及时修正。
[FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

 

[cnyycl]

回复: 看看我的职业职责描述与翻译是否准确？请高手提意见。

前面我填的schedule3是表格直接copy下来提交的，有点乱，现在主帖改不了了，但可看清楚。

 

[cnyycl]

回复: 看看我的职业职责描述与翻译是否准确？请高手提意见。

职业都是Mine Ventilation Engineer
三个时段的职业Main duties(职责):
第一时段：
Development of Mine Safety Training Program
Supervision of Security Qualification of Mine Workers
Mine Safety Training Organization and Iimplementation of Training Programs
Mine Safety Training and Training Classes
第二时段：
Mine Rescue Facilities, Setting and Monitoring
Professional Training for Mine Rescue Team
Mine Disaster Relief and Rescue
Mine Disaster Prevention and Treatment Planning
Implementation and Coordination of the Mine Disaster Prevention Plan
第三时段：
The Planning and Adjustment of Ventilation Systems
Mine Ventilation Design and Setting Standards
Mine Design and Distribution of Air Flow
Mine Ventilation and Mechanical Regulation
Mine Ventilation and Safety Checks

主要是想请您对照2143职业看看以上我填的内容有没有问题，谢谢！

 

[xchn818]

回复: 看看我的职业职责描述与翻译是否准确？请高手提意见。

职责描述应该是NOC的职责描述的改写。我看你写的内容对不上，而且每行描述太短（至少要和NOC一样长）。英语描述也不合适。NOC是用的谓语动词＋宾语的方式，要保持一致。
比如
Mine Safety Training and Training Classes
根本看不出来是在做什么？Attend a training class还是train other people?

 

[cnyycl]

回复: 看看我的职业职责描述与翻译是否准确？请高手提意见。

职责描述应该是NOC的职责描述的改写。我看你写的内容对不上，而且每行描述太短（至少要和NOC一样长）。英语描述也不合适。NOC是用的谓语动词＋宾语的方式，要保持一致。
比如
Mine Safety Training and Training Classes
根本看不出来是在做什么？Attend a training class还是train other people?

谢谢你，上面是填schedule3表格第11项的内容。第11项内容的 Main duties字数太多放不下。
谓语动词＋宾语的方式，这个你说得太好了，，我改一下，都搞成动宾结构。一会我帖上来，请你指教。

另外我想问一下，我女儿目前在国内读大学，我移民成功后她一定要中断大学学习吗？也就是说她能在国内继续读大学完成学业吗？因为还有两年就毕业了，毕业前不会放弃取得国内学历。
还有，第一次登陆，是不是女儿必须登陆，能否因为她在国内读大学的理由而免登陆呢？盼望解惑。

 

[cnyycl]

回复: 看看我的职业职责描述与翻译是否准确？请高手提意见。

我把我原来打算的三个时间段Main duties写一下，后续按你的意见改。
第一个单位的工作：矿山职业培训中心教师
制订矿山安全培训计划Development of mine safety training program
监管矿山职工安全资格supervision of Security qualification of Mine workers
矿山安全培训培训计划组织与实施Mine safety training organization and implementation of training programs
矿井安全训练与培训授课Mine safety training and training classes
第二个单位的工作：矿山救护队工程师，副队长
矿井救护设施的设置与监管Mine rescue facilities, setting and monitoring
矿山救护队专业训练Professional training for mine rescue team
组织抢险救灾和救护、实施和监督灾变预防计划执行Disaster relief and rescue organization, implementation and monitoring of the implementation of disaster prevention plans
矿井灾害预防与处理规划Mine Disaster Prevention and Treatment Planning

第三个单位的工作：矿山通风工程师
通风系统的规划与调整The planning and adjustment of ventilation systems
通风设施的设计与设置标准制定Ventilation design and setting standards
矿井风量的设计与分配Mine design and distribution of air flow
矿井通风设施与机械的监管Mine ventilation and mechanical regulation

 

[cnyycl]

回复: 看看我的职业职责描述与翻译是否准确？请高手提意见。

我把我原来打算的三个时间段Main duties写一下，后续按你的意见改。
第一个单位的工作：矿山职业培训中心教师
制订矿山安全培训计划Development of mine safety training program
监管矿山职工安全资格supervision of Security qualification of Mine workers
矿山安全培训培训计划组织与实施Mine safety training organization and implementation of training programs
矿井安全训练与培训授课Mine safety training and training classes
第二个单位的工作：矿山救护队工程师，副队长
矿井救护设施的设置与监管Mine rescue facilities, setting and monitoring
矿山救护队专业训练Professional training for mine rescue team
组织抢险救灾和救护、实施和监督灾变预防计划执行Disaster relief and rescue organization, implementation and monitoring of the implementation of disaster prevention plans
矿井灾害预防与处理规划Mine Disaster Prevention and Treatment Planning

第三个单位的工作：矿山通风工程师
通风系统的规划与调整The planning and adjustment of ventilation systems
通风设施的设计与设置标准制定Ventilation design and setting standards
矿井风量的设计与分配Mine design and distribution of air flow
矿井通风设施与机械的监管Mine ventilation and mechanical regulation

这个家园朋友能不能给点意见呢？汉语也是动宾结构啊？